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LETTER 37

 Letter_37


19 March, 2008


The Director

Aged Care Assessment Team

Brisbane South Region

78 , Masterson St Acacia Ridge

Brisbane 4110


Dear Sir/ Madam ,


Re: Mr.Henry  O ' Keefe

DOB: 2 February ,1925


I am writing to request you to arrange a home visit for Mr O' Keefe, who underwent removal of Mmalignant Mmelanoma large lesion, requires , further assessment as well as to arrange assistance in managing his Daily needs livings as his wife finds it difficult to manage by herself.  he lives with aged wife.


Mr O' Keefe got admitted to hospital on 14 March,2008 with 1- the diagnosis of Malignant Melanoma left shoulder and he underwent large lesion removal on the same day. He was discharged on 17 March , 2008.


  • Re construct this paragraph


  • 1 -you have mentioned it in the introduction 


  • Start with your visit, not in detail Just mention that he has been assisted well is fine now except forgetfulness and unbalance.



At my first home visit on 18 March,2008  I assisted Mr Henry to shower and dressed his wound which was healthy. However, Mr O'Keefe experienced increased pain in the hands and legs. Therefore, he was given panadol  2 which was prescribed to him 3 times a day. Besides, he has been continuing  Glucosamine and  Chondroitin supplement as recommended.Mrs.O'Keefe has concerns that Mr O’keefe is showing sign of forgetting things which made her worried. In addition, she seeks the help of neighbours to assist her daily living activities. On my today's visit he was not remembering that I showered and dressed his wound yesterday. The house  was were filthy and disorganized. However, Our service will be continued till 24 th March and his suture will be removed at Master Public Hospital.


  • Misplacing of however

  • As per the case note your first day is 19th. Somebody from your agency went and given care on 18 th. 

  • Kindly read the case note 3 times before writing.




In view of the above, it would be highly appreciable if you could make an arrangement as soon as possible to get assistance for assist their daily livings.

 



For the contact details of Mr Henry:

12 Donaldson street

41 , Greenslops 4121

Phone no : (07) 3941 2267


Please do not hesitate to contact me for further queries.


Yours faithfully,


Registered Nurse

Blue Skies Home Nursing Centre


You are writing not to a medical team

No need to write all treatment history in detail

Focus should be on their needs 

As soon as possible should be in the introduction 

Needs more practice and focus

Good luck!!

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