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LETTER 41

 Letter -41


The Director

Aged Care Assessment Team

Brisbane South Region

78 Masterson st.

Acacia Ridge

Brisbane


19 March, 2008


Dear Sir/Madam,

[Space]

Re:Mr.Henry O'Keefe

DOB:02/02/1925


Mr.O'Keefe underwent a left shoulder malignant melanoma lesion removal [on which date?]. His family requires a home visit to assess and provide ongoing assistance 

to meet their daily needs.

  • Should mention the urgency of the letter.


1.On 14/02/2008, Mr.O'Keefe underwent surgery at Mater public hospital and following his discharge on 2.19/03/2008 ,he has been taken care from our facility.

  • Repeating information

  • He discharged on 17 th 

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  • Take a total of 10-12 minutes to do that.


During the first home visit, Mr.O'Keefe has confusion ,memory loss and balance problem . Therefore, his wife( Mrs.Dorothy, aged 82)was concerned about the future and finds difficult to manage the house and garden.

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  • The whole paragraph went wrong 

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  • Don’t mix your information.



On the subsequent visit, Mr.O'Keefe has been provided with wound dressing and the wound remains clean; however, the balance and memory issue remains the same. As a result, the house found disoriented, bathroom and kitchen are disordered. They received most of the help from the neighbpurs [spell check] including cooking meals for the family.


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In view of the above, it would be greatly apprecoated [ spell check]if you could arrange home help assistance to manage the house, garden, preparation of meals and shopping as soon as possible.



If you have any questions, please contact me.


Yours faithfully,


Registered Nurse



  • Urgency  of this letter is very important which should be in the introduction.

  • There are many grammatical and spelling corrections that need to be addressed.

  • Try to plan your letter before writing it.

  • Best of Luck!!!

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