LETTER 42

 No- 42

The Director

Aged Care Assessment Team

Brisbane South Region

78 Masterson St, Acacia Ridge

Brisbane 4110

19 March, 2008

Dear Sir / Madam, 

Re : Mr Henry O'Keefe

DOB: 02 February, 1925

I am writing to request an urgent home visit for Mr and Mrs O'Keefe to assess their needs and to arrange appropriate further assistance, as they have difficulties to cope with daily living activities.

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Mr O'Keefe, an aged pensioner, who lives with his wife Dorothy. She also a/an aged pensioner.They does not have any children.

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Mr O'keefe has been under our care, following his discharge from hospital on 17 March, 2008. He underwent surgery for the treatment of malignant melanoma on his left shoulder.1

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During home visits, Mr O'Keefe has been provided wound dressings and assisted with showering. His wound is being was healed well without getting any complications. However, he has been developed impaired memory, unsteady gait, and rests most of the day. Therefore, Dorothy has difficulties to manage him, the house and the garden. Apart from that our care will end when his sutures to be removed on 24 March.

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In view of the above, kindly visit them and arrange some assistance for managing the house, garden, and with shopping and preparation of food. Their address is 12 Donaldson Street, Greensloper 4121.

Please do not hesitate to contact me for further queries.

Yours faithfully, 

Registered Nurse

Blue Sky Home Nursing.

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