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LETTER 39

 Letter-39

The Director 

Aged Care Assessment Team 

Brisbane South Region 

78 Masterson St. Acacia Ridge 

Brisbane 4110


19 March,2008 


Dear Sir/Madam, 


Re: Mr Henry O'Keeffe

DOB:02 February,2008


I am writing to request a home visit for Mr O' Keefe, who is recovering from malignant melanoma in his left shoulder.

  • Home visit is not only for the patient but also got his wife.

  • urgency should be shown 


Mr O'Keefe underwent surgery of for lesion removal on 14 March, 2008 and had was discharged from on 17 March 2008. Since his discharge, we have been doing providing daily assistance with dressing and showering at his home visit for assisting him with showers. On today's visit, his general health condition has been seen as improved and the wound is healing without complication.


Me O'Keefe is an aged pensioner lives in a housing commission home visit with his wife, who is also an aged pensioner. As per the hospital referral, the home visit has been organised only until suture removal, which will be on 24 March,2008 and thereafter nursing care will end.


His wife is getting some help from there neighbour with shopping and cooking meals for the couple. It is noted that she is having trouble keeping with routine household work and gardening.

  • the information which u have shortened is the vital information 

  • u should tell the receiver about the exact problems in detail.

  • tell them why they have to be assessed immediately 

  • Tell his current situation that he has balancing and forgetfulness and connect it with her wife's current concerns.


In view of the above, it would be greatly appreciated if you could provide further assistance and assess their needs as soon as possible.

  • writing as soon as possible here is ok

  • But you should mention it in the intro

  • receiver should be Informed about the urgency in the introduction 


Please do not hesitate to contact me,if you have any queries. 


  • Don't use comma when u use if in between the sentence 


Yours sincerely, 

 yours faithfully ,



Nurse 

Blue Skies Home Nursing Centre




Try to avoid minor mistakes 

Try to write mistake-free sentences 

Best of Luck!!!

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