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Letter 32

Letter 32


15 January,2018


The Director 

Community Child Health service

41 Vulture Street 

West End 

Brisbane 4101


Dear Sir/Madam 


Re:Ms Nicole Boyle,aged 20(both mother and child should be referred)





The purpose of this letter is to[refer] Ms Boyle, who was given  gave birth to her first child. She requires a home visit from your facility regarding advice and assistance for child care both mother and child following her discharge today.


  • Good  introduction 



On 10 Janurary 2018, Ms Boyle was admitted to hospital and underwent an emergency cesarean  [spell check]section due to fetal distress and failure to progress. On 11 January 2018,she delivered a male baby with weight of 4.3kg.


During the postoperative period, her post partum [one word]haemorrhage was minimal of 800ml 1 and wound was dry and clean. 2 She was responded well with treatment; however, her haemoglobin was 90g/l  so she was commenced on vitamin c and iron supplements (fefol) Therefore,vitamin c and fefol were commenced . Ms Boyle has less confidence for caring for the baby,bathing and breast feeding[one word].In addition, 3 her baby is sucking well but she prefers to change to bottle feeding.At discharge, baby weight was is 4kg.

 

1 this can not be here as it was not seen on the same day

2 which treatment?

3case note does not have this information( case note says she started breastfeeding but has no confidence)



Ms Boyle is single and has no contact with family members and father of  the child for the last 4months.She feels isolated and insecure as she lives in a rental flat.Presently,she receives sole parent benefits.


  • Kindly do the needful for her betterment. Please provide support as she has doubt that she is not a good mother and she also verbalized about offering the baby for adoption.(this information should not be here)


If you have any queries,please contact me.


Yours faithfully 


Registered nurse



  • Good presentation 

  • Try to avoid minor mistakes 

  • Concentrate more on proper data presentation.

  • Paragraphing can be better

  • Best of luck!!!

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