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The Director,
Julia Farr Rehabilitation Centre
229 Fullarton Road 509Dear Sir/Madam,
Re: Mr. Alex Maydew, aged 23.
I am writing in regards to Mr. Maydew who had a neurological injury. He requires follow-up care and assessment.
This letter is being written to request further care and assistance for Mr X who has been treated here with respect to his neurological injuris.
Mr. Maydew had a car accident 10 months ago. He has been normal brain function since 2 months ago. but he loses his speech facility. He is improving mobility with the help of physiotherapy and he is confined to a wheelchair.
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He was in coma state for 4 months in the hospital and 4 months in our care facility and eventually woke up from coma 2 months ago. He regained his normal brain function, however, his speaking ability is affected.Currently,....
Though he is confined to the wheelchair, hia mobility is being improved by physiotherapy.
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Socially, Mr. Maydew was a third-year student at the University of South Australia. His mother and sister are incredibly responsible and caring.
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He is depressed since he is in an aged care facility
His mother have the same concerns
Therefore, request for transfer for appropriate care.
As a discharge plan, it could would be greatly appreciated, if you could make arrangements for his continuity of care after his transfer. 1 Kindly provide ongoing speech therapy and physiotherapy. Please note the possible continuation of online studies, because he could resume part-time study.
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If you have any queries regarding Mr.Maydew, please do not hesitate to contact me.
Yours faithfully,
Registered nurse
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