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ALEX MEYDEW LETTER 1

Date  Todays date


The Director,

Julia Farr Rehabilitation Centre

229 Fullarton Road 509Dear Sir/Madam, 


Re: Mr. Alex Maydew, aged 23.


I am writing in regards to Mr. Maydew who had a neurological injury. He requires follow-up care and assessment.

  • This letter is being written to request further care and assistance for Mr X who has been treated here with respect to his neurological injuris.

Mr. Maydew had a car accident 10 months ago. He has been normal brain function since 2 months ago. but he loses his speech facility. He is improving mobility with the help of physiotherapy and he is confined to a wheelchair.

  • Background information  is lacking 

  • He was in  coma state for 4 months in the hospital  and 4 months in our care facility and eventually woke up  from coma 2 months ago. He regained his normal brain function, however,   his speaking ability is affected.Currently,....


  • Though he is confined to the wheelchair, hia mobility is being improved by physiotherapy.


  • Grammar usage is incorrect 

  • Avoid But  and Use capital  after a full stop 

Socially, Mr. Maydew was a third-year student at the University of South Australia. His mother and sister are incredibly responsible and caring.

  • Missing  important information 

  • He is depressed since he is in an aged care facility 

  • His mother have the same concerns 

  • Therefore,  request  for transfer for appropriate  care. 




As a discharge plan, it could would be greatly appreciated, if you could make arrangements for his continuity of care after his transfer. 1 Kindly provide ongoing speech therapy and physiotherapy. Please note the possible continuation of online studies, because he could resume part-time study.

  • In addition  he requires..1

If you have any queries regarding Mr.Maydew, please do not hesitate to contact me.


Yours faithfully, 


Registered nurse


No need to put a full stop after Mr


Ok

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