DAY 2 CORRECTED LETTER 2

 

19 July,2011

The MS Physiotherapy centre

588 Hay Street

Subiaco

Dear Sir/Madam,

Re:Mr Stephen Mabel,DOB:18June,1972

I am writing on behalf of Mrs Sandra wife of,Mr Mabel,who is recuperating from the knee injury.He requires daily home visits for improving his ambulation.

• First sentence is confusing 

• No need to write that you are writing on behalf of his wife

• He needs only one home visit

Mr Mabel presented on 12 June with a serious injury on the left knee following a fall from the descending stairs. Consequently, general practitioner referred him to our care for performing dressing to the affected area and help with activities of daily living .

• You have to write the complete date

On subsequent visits,Mr Mabel attained a satisfactory recovery without any sign of infection.He is able to walk with the help of assistance; ,however,he has minimal pain.

• Good

Based on the past medical history,Mr Mabel has had cerebrovascular accident in 2010.He also has slight slurred speech, impaired balance and uses walking aid for mobility.In context to social history,he is an accountant and resides with wife.

Under the above circumstance,it would be greatly appreciated if you could continue home visits for few more days to regain his strength.

For any information regarding Mr Mabel, please do not hesitate to contact me.

Yours faithfully,

JOHANNA ANDREW (no need to write the whole name in capital letter)

Senior Nurse

Your Health Care Agency