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LETTER 2

 Ms Marica Devonport

West End Physiotherapy centre

62 Vulture street

West End 

Brisbane 4101


23 may 2008


Dear Ms Marica,


Re: Mr Bob Dawson,DOB:25 September,1924


I am writing to refer Mr Dawson who has been dy with cerebrovascular accident,who requires home visit to improve his mobility.

  • Mentioning presenting complaint in intro will be good

  • purpose would be clear


Mr Dawson fell on 18 may 2008, while descending stairs.he had grazed on left leg knee.General practitioner  advised for daily visit from our facility to care for dressing and assist with showering. The wound redressed and no sign of infection.

  • Dont present data in a bit by bit style.

  • You have to make compound sentences 

  • organise your information in the case note.



Mr Dawson had Cardiovascular accident and recovery is uneventful .He has slight speech impairment and weakness on the left side .He is walking with his wife's support.He lives his own house with his wife on behalf of Mrs Elizabeth.



In view of the above,his wife has requested home visit for assistance to improve his mobility with a walking stick.


It would be greatly appreciated to visit him and provide  care and Management.


Please do not hesitate to contact me further queries regarding the patient Mr Dawson address is 141 Montague,West End 4101phone no:(07)34421958.


Yours sincerely

Sonia Mathew

Registered Nurse

Blue Nursing Home Care Agency

  • Total presentation along with organisation is wrong. 

  • You should need a proper training.

  • Kindly approach any training centre to get a proper guidance. 









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