LETTER CORRECTION

03 March,2022

Mrs Mary Francis

District nurse

Dear Mrs Francis

Re: Mrs Norris Thompson

Age:52 years

I am writing to update you about the current health status of MRS Norris Thompson who required for the futher care and management at your service .she has been diagnosed with venous cellulitis .she is being discharged today.

Is this a known case?

Writing to a district nurse .So you can't write update.

Better to write the patients presenting complaint in the first sentence and then the purpose of the letter

requires -tense form

Spell check for further

Mrs Thompson was admitted to the hospital due to she had fallen on the rocks and she got injury/injured on foot.

During hospitalization she was administered and abiotic .she performed blood tests including wound swab.

Antibiotics were administered is the correct usage

Spell check for antibiotics.

Blood tests were performed.

Mrs Thompson has diabetic four years back

Mrs X has been diagnosed with diabetes for four years.

.she was prescribed medication for total five and also add calcium for bone.

( Sentence structure is not correct .need more practice)

It would be appreciated if you could provide education regarding would care, independent with her daily activity living ,self-regulated diet and also follow up care

Important information were missing.

Type of dressing.

Should you have any queries please do not hesitate to contact

Yours sincerely,

Registered nurse

Need more practice.

Good luck.

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