LETTER CORRECTION (TINCY)

05 May 2010

The Community Nurse Head

Care Well Hospital

Birmingham

Dear Nurse,

Re: Mr. Alfred Billy, aged 52

I am writing to refer Mr. Billy who is recovering from removal of basal cell carcinoma.He requires ongoing care from your service followed/following his discharged/discharge today.

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Mr. Billy was admitted on 21 March, 2010 to our hospital and was performed skin biopsy¹ for pathological study. The study result revealed that the diagnosis is skin cancer. Consequently, he underwent the surgery and has been prescribed on Panadein Fort 500 ²mg for pain relief.

1.a biopsy was performed

2.medication was prescribed.

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Socially, Mr. Billy is a truck driver, lives with his wife Mrs. Maria Jennifer and please/would like to be contact/contacted with her in case of an emergency. He is an alcoholic( don't be judgemental) (he has a habit of drinking alcohol and smoking cigarettes ) for the past 30 years as well as a smoker.

Today, Mr. Billy is perfectly well and does not report any sort of pain. However, he needs daily observation and the medication to be continue/continued for one more week.

It would be greatly appreciated if you could provide follow up care and support for him to overcome the current condition.

If you have any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me.

Yours faithfully,

Charge Nurse.

Royal Perth Hospital.

SENTENCE STRUCTURE NEED TO BE IMPROVED.

BEST OF LUCK

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