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CORRECTED LETTER

 24  October  2009


Ms. Jennifer Adams

The Elizabeth Community Health Centre

125 Munno Parra Avenue

Elizabeth, 5098


Dear Ms. Adams,


Re: Mr. Martin Wilson, aged 62


I am writing to refer Mr. Martin Wilson who requires immediate attention and follow up care from your service due to gambling addiction. He is being discharged today.

  • Attempt of suicide due to depression related tp gambling addiction - is the condition of the patient.

Mr. Wilson is a retired bookkeeper, and lives with his wife and son. He is a social drinker and has depression as a result of gambling addiction which was started two years ago. Additionally, he lost his friends and a huge amount of money including his pension funds. His family was unknown about his addiction and he is in debt.

  • He has habit of drinking alcohol is good 

  • Since it is an urgent letter because of gambling addiction and suicide attempt  you can organise  in a better way.

Mr. Wilson was admitted to hospital on 13 October 2009 due to overdose of Mogodol. He was weak and depressed therefore, prescribed anti depressants. In addition, he has been diagnosed with type 2 diabetes which was advised regarding diet and medications. He has psoriasis and is on medicine.


  • Sentence construction need to be improved

In view of the above, please encourage and assist Mr. Wilson to join the gambling addiction group as well as with quitline. He is physically unfit for which to be continued with the wheel chair for another one week.

  • Smoking is not mentioned in the social history 

It would be greatly appreciated if you could arrange an appointment for gambling addiction therapy and motivate in social sporting activities such as lawn bowls to help him to rejuvenate life.

  • Need to organize your letter

  • Clubbing of information is lacking. Clarity will lost 

  • Repeating same information.

If you have any queries,  please feel free to contact me.

Yours sincerely,

Registered Nurse.


Best of luck 

Team oet4u

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