WRITING TEST LETTER 2

The General Practitioner Nurse

Greystone General Practice

57 Sand Lane

Greystone

10 November,2020

Dear Nurse, sir or madam

Re: Mr Jonathan Thompson, DOB:01 August,1984

I am writing to request wound care and management for Mr Thompson. He is recovering from incision and drainage of perinial (spell check)abscess.

Better to write the presenting complaint first then, purpose of the letter.
Avoid mistakes in spelling.

Mr Thompson was admitted on 08 November with the complaints of painful swelling and pus collection near anus. On the next day, he underwent affor-mentioned surgery, which was uneventful. Post operatively,( single word) he has been commenced on metronidazole 500 mg four times daily, which needs to be continued for five days.In addition, his wound was managed with prontosan and kaltostat along with tegaderm.Currently, he has made good progress.

Write only one one idea in one paragraph.
If you are writing a care based letter organise your letter carefully.

Mr Thompson is a software engineer, who lives in a rented house. He consumes alchohol(spell check) and smokes excessively.

Irrelevant information

It would be greatly appreciated if you could provide daily dressing as prescribed. Kindly monitor for any signs of infection on sugery( spell check) site. He was advised to use stool softener and eat fibre based diet. Kindly encourage him to complete the course of antibiotics. Please note, he has a follow up review at surgical out patients deapartment(spell check) in six weeks.

Repetition of some ideas.

If you have any queries, feel free to contact me( full stop)

Yours sincerely, faithfully

Charge Nurse

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