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LETTER 26

08/04/2018


Dr Hank  Farquad

Certified Diabetes Educator

Endocrine Specialist and Associates, 115

(Address is very important)

Dear Dr Farquad, 


Re: Ms Tabitha Taborlin

Age:45 years


I am writing to refer Ms Taborlin who requires stricter glycemic control and possible insulin pump in view of her type 1 diabetes mellitus at your service. She is being discharged today.


  • Wrong purpose


Ms Taborlin is a school teacher who smokes two cigarettes daily .she does not get exercise and her BMI is 18.2.She has had type 1 diabetes mellitus since  for 7 years and has hypertension.He is on lantus 45 unit and humalog with 12 unit of nutritional base line;although, she noncompliances with insulin.She had multiple episodes of diabetic keto acidos  (one word);for which, she was last admitted on 02/04/2018.


Today, she presented to the clinic for her appointment.she has been doing well since discharge; however, she is still noncompliance noncompliant with her insulin and recommended diet.She was educated regarding insulin administration , micro vascular and macro vascular complications as well as smoking cessation.

  • Microvascular and macrovascular are one words.

It would be greatly appreciated if you could provide educational pamphlets and refills for Lantus and Humalog. Please note, she has a follow-up appointment in one month.


  • Good paragraph



Kindly do the needful and do not hesitate to contact me for further queries.


Yours sincerely,


Registered Nurse



  • Concentrate on your sentence construction

  • You have serious grammatical issues

  • Gender mixing is punishable

  • At the end, you have written the purpose correctly that has to be paraphrased in the intro.

  • Read the case note carefully and interpret it.

  • Concentrate on the organisation of case notes.

  • Not necessary to write a certified diabetic educator

  • Good Luck!!!

  • Team OET4U

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