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LETTER 23

Dr Hank Farquad

Certified Diabetic Educator

Endocrine Specialist and Assosiates(spelling)

115 Bruke (spelling)St, Omaha


O8 April, 2018

 

Dear Dr Farquad, 


Re: Ms Tabitha Taborlin, aged 45


Ms Taborlin has had type 1 diabetes mellitus since/for seven years along with non-compliance with insulin regimen.She requires strict glycemic control and possible insulin pump.

  • Wrong purpose


Ms Taborlin has had multiple episodes of diabetic ketoacidosis. She had was admitted to hospital on 02 April, 2018 with 530 mmo/L of glucose level. She had has been managed with insulin and intravenous fluids and was discharged her with stable HbA1c. Additionally, she has been prescribed Lantus 45 units, at night and Humalog 12 units according to her nutritional baseline.

  • Additionally is high grammatical word try to use In addition to or Besides


On today's appointment, Ms Taborlin is found feels better since her discharge from the hospital. However, she has not been followed recommended insulin as well as diet. Therefore, she was educated regarding the necessity of glucose testing, insulin administration, micro and macrovascular complications of diabetes and smoking cessation, as she smokes moderately. Apart from that she was provided educational pamphlets and refilled for Lantus and Humalog.

  • The last sentence of your second paragraph is the actual purpose of the letter, so u can not say that it has been given.



Ms Taborlin is single and lives alone. She has essential hypertension. She is physically inactive and is in underweight with 48 kilograms.


In view of the above, kindly assess Ms Taborlin and manage her. She has a follow-up visit in one month.


If you have any queries, please contact me.


Yours sincerely, 


Registered Nurse

First Family Care

3959 Abalone Lane

Omaha


  • It is not necessary to write a certified diabetic educator...

  • Although your letter was fine until the last sentence of the second paragraph, the total quality of your writing has been ruined by that sentence

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  • When you get a case note, read it as much as you can.

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