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LETTER 17

18 March, 2018


Maria DiCoccio (salutation is must)

Receiving Nurse

Proud Hurst Proudhurst Mental Health Home

231, Brightfield Avenue

Proud Hurst Proudhurst


Dear Nurse, Dear Ms DiCoccio,


Re:Ms.Bethany Tailor,Age:35-year-old 35 years or aged 35 or 35-year-old


  • Normally 35-year-old would write with some other information like 35-year*old teacher


I am writing to refer Ms Tailor who has been diagnosed with Schizophrenia requires on going /ONGOING monitoring and care following by her discharge today.


  • Following her discharge or followed by her discharge


Ms Tailor was self admitted on 1 March,2018 with the complaints of auditory and visual command hallucinations telling harm herself and visual hallucinations- shadows figures with graining faces.Besides, along with delusions. as personal connections to various political leaders. On assessment, she was agitated and aggressive and was responding to internal stimuli with thought blocking and latency. Therefore, she was commenced with antipsychotic medication risperidone. Fortunately, her symptoms were she ceased reporting auditory and visual hallucinations.

  • Self  is not a relevant data

  • Comprehend your case note. Otherwise it would be a lengthy one.

  • She was commenced is wrong usage. Check with letter 16

  • Last sentence is a bit confusing. 


Ms.Tailer lives on disability allowance for schizophrenia. She has a history of polysubstance abuse, predominantly cocaine and alcohol. Her last usage of cocaine was on 28 February 2018.In terms of her past medical history ,she has hypertension secondary to fibromuscular dysplasia.In addition, she has primary hyperparathyroidism for which she is on levethyroxine 88 mcg daily.However,she is not complied with medications.

  • First line is not relevant 

  • (In terms of past medical history, ) now considering inappropriate in oet 

  • Current data should be explained in detail 

  • Instead of this paragraph u could have written current data here

  • Avoid irrelevant data



It would be highly appreciable if you would could moniter/MONITOR  her compliance on medications inorder( two words)to prevent decompensated schizophrenia. Kindly make an arrangement for behavioural therapy if possible. She would be discharged on with Respiridone 4 g daily every at night by mouth as well as Respiridone 1 mg twice daily in case of agitation or psychosis.

  • Spell check


Thank you for involving in Ms Tailor on going care and recovery attending this case.Please don't do not hesitate to contact me for any queries.


Your faithfully, Yours sincerely,

Registered Nurse



  • If u know the name of receiver use yours sincerely otherwise use yours faithfully 

  • You have missed some important current data

  • Read the case note well before write

  • Proper organisation is inevitable

  • Split your time properly

  • First 5 mins reading then 5 for planning then 30 mins for writing and the last 5 minute is for proofreading

  • Good luck!!!!!

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