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LETTER 16

Ms Maria Dicoccio 

Recieving Nurse

Proudhurst Mental Health Home 

231 Brightfield Avenue 

Proudhurst 


18 March, 2018


Dear Ms Dicoccio,


Re: Ms Bethany Tailor 

Age : 35 years 


Your patient, Ms Bethany Tailor has been diagnosed with decompensated schizophrenia, requires follow-up care. She is being discharged today. 

  • Without your patient introduction is okay.


Ms Tailor was self-admitted on 01 March 2018. On admission, she was noted to have (1)auditory command hallucination, visual hallucination and delusion. She was commenced on rispoderone.(Stop here.)

  • It is better to write one idea in one paragraph.

  • 1.Auditory and visual hallucinations along with delusion.

  • was commenced is wrong usage bcz the verb commence is rarely use in passive. better use she was recommended or she was advised  to take etc

  • If you need to write commenced  as you wrote it is to be 

  • rispoderone was commenced 


 During hospitalization, she was assessed for objective signs of psychosis and redirected from delusions. In addition, her medical medication compliance( 2)was (has been)ensured and she was assisted to maintain behavioural control. Currently, she has made a good progress; however, it can be decompensated if not on medications or abusing substances. 

  • Small mistakes 

  • 2- instead of was u could have used has been 

  • Last sentence is perfect

  • Better to add that she was agitated aggressive 



Ms Tailor is on oral risperidone 4milligram nightly. Additionally, risperidone 1milligram can be administered as needed twice daily for agitation and psychosis. 


Kindly contact me for further queries. 


Yours sincerely, 


Registered Nurse


  • all of the current data is important 

  • points not to be missed 


  • 1- provide therapy if possible 

  • 2- she has good insights but has fair judgement 


  • Writing a simple letter doesn't mean to avoid relevant data

  • almost good organization 

  • can do better presentation 

  • best wishes!!!


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